:://for now, hush
edits 1.10.03
let the salted heat be savored
and our woes be gone-
freed souls, swimmingly racuous, 
grace rolling in timeless grass.

let the falling leaves be rustled
and our blustery quiet invite company in,
fading sunlight, foilage translated,
reading as restful shadows


edits 1.09.03
ooh! brain flash. so i was reading this again and i realized that i my two stanza images thus far were discordant. one was summer, and racous yet careless, and one was falling leaves and contemplative, then i realized they could be seasons! so now i need two more, spring and winter!



edits 1.08.03
let the heat be savored
and our woes be gone-
freed souls, swimmingly racuous, 
grace rolling in timeless grass.

let the falling leaves be rustled
blustery quiet inviting company in,
fading sunlight so translated,
reading as restful shadows


? opinons ?


original:
let the spring be savored and our woes be gone-
two souls, swimmingly racuous, smelling cut grass.

let the leaves be rustled and our quiet invite company-
sunlight, so translated, reading as restful shadows

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3 thoughts on “

  1. damm yoo you are soo orginall n i love dat..ur poems are soo enticing infact contagious .i read all em daz how much i was caputerd  by it …its soo cool to see someone as you write such uniq stuff and something daz really different…..mad n mad n and mad propzzz aite keep writing cause its great

    ~thaalams~

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  2. how does blustery and quiet go together? the harshness of the word blustery kind of cuts into the tranquility of the poem but i really like the assonance with rustled. maybe that’s what you intended so i’ll shut up 🙂

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